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The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts demonstrate the proportion of workers in various industries in
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 A and
town
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B
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.
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, it appears that in
town
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 A the changes are more significant than in
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B
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. The manufacturing sector is the highest in
town
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B
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 in 1960 and 2010. In 1960 in
town
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 A, the largest part was in the manufacturing field with 41% next to it
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 the
sales
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 the
services
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. For 2010, the majority were in the
services
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 sector, which dramatically increased from 29% to 64%. Manufacturing has declined by about 20% making it in second place.
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, the
sales
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 decreased from 30% to 16%. For
town
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B
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, manufacturing is the biggest field in both years. There is a noticeable incline in the
services
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 and the
sales
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 departments. The
services
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 elevated from 10% to 25% and for the
sales
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, it went from 20% to 22%.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, b, sales, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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