The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts demonstrate the proportion of workers in various industries in

town

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A and

town

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, it appears that in

town

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A the changes are more significant than in

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. The manufacturing sector is the highest in

town

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in 1960 and 2010. In 1960 in

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A, the largest part was in the manufacturing field with 41% next to it

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the

sales

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and

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the

services

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. For 2010, the majority were in the

services

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sector, which dramatically increased from 29% to 64%. Manufacturing has declined by about 20% making it in second place.

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, the

sales

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also

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decreased from 30% to 16%. For

town

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, manufacturing is the biggest field in both years. There is a noticeable incline in the

services

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and the

sales

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departments. The

services

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elevated from 10% to 25% and for the

sales

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, it went from 20% to 22%.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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4 paragraphs

147 words

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