The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates information about the number of jobless

level

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in the

Japan

and other countries in Europe from 1993 to 2007

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, from 1993 to 2007 the

most

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highest

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country that has jobless rate

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was

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the EU

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while

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the UK

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slightly below the

Moreover

Japan

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unemployment

degree was lower

compare

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to the

and

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the UK

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Thus

, indicating

Japan

is successfully maintaining the nation's productivity

level

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with,

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the UK

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in 1993 had higher

unemployment

rates

rather than

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the EU

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, as time

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on, the jobless

level

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the UK

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was

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decreased a lot

and

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apply

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making it the country with

smallest

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unemployment

rates

in the

. It described in 2003 where

UK'

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rates

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below the rest of Europe and

Japan

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Japan

showing

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a great productivity levels

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a great productivity level

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by maintaining the jobless rate not above 6 from 1993 to 2007.

Furthermore

comparing

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with the

and

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the UK

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Japan

unemployment

rates

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was the lowest except in 2003. But

then

, from 1999 the

unemployment

level

increasing

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untill

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until

it higher than

in 2003.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, uk, japan, eu, unemployment, rates with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

173 words

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