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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the line graph illustrates some information about the
unemployment
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 proportion in the
UK
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, Europe and Japan between 1993 and 2007.
overall
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, decreasing trend, the
UK
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 and Europe had the same pattern
while
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 Japan experienced steady growth in
unemployment
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rates
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 .
unemployment
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rates
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 in the
UK
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 nearly halved during 14 years , those steadily declined until 2001 and were consistent at nearly 5% between 2001 and 2005, and had increased by 1% till 2007
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 at the beginning ,the
unemployment
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rates
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 went up in the EU realm until 1997 which experienced a high amount of
unemployment
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 by approximately 12%, afterwards those witnessed reduction and reached 8% at 2007. all the time, the
unemployment
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rates
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 were the lowest
rates
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 in Japan
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 those saw a dramatic increase until 2003 which was more than the amount of
unemployment
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 in
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UK
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 and reaching 6% which was three times greater than the proportion in 1993, after that trend reduced ,
finally
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 reached 4% which was the lowest rate among those nations.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, uk, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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