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The supplied line chart compares the proportion of female employees in 4 nations, namely the US, France, Afghanistan and Korea, in 2 decades starting from 1985.

The supplied line chart compares the proportion of female employees in 4 nations, namely the US, France, Afghanistan and Korea, in 2 decades starting from 1985.
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The line chart illustrates the percentage of women employees in various countries from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that both Korea and France climbed
whereas
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, Afghanistan and the USA decreased dramatically. Observing the line in more detail, the proportion of women employees in Korea soared gradually from about 1985 to 2000 accounting for 45% and 60 % respectively.
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 it fell to almost 59%. Another point to be noticed is that there was a slight increase from about 33 to around 40, before plummeting, remarkably to roughly 1%.
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, between 1985 and 2005 the figure for female employees rocketed dramatically to 55% in 2005.
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, Korea had a Sharp increase of roughly 40%.

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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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