The line graph illustrates the expenditure of British citizens on four different purposes of visiting abroad (holiday, business, visiting friends or relatives and miscellaneous) from 1993 to 2013.

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The chart provides information about how much money British citizens spent on four different reasons

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for

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visiting abroad : holiday,

business

, visiting friends or relatives and miscellaneous, from 1993 to 2013.

It is clear that

people spent the most on holidays and the least on

micellaneous

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miscellaneous

Overall

, expenditure citizens spent going abroad for holiday had a wide fluctuation. It had a sharp increase from 9

billion

pounds

in 1993 and

reaching

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a peak in 2008 with a figure of roughly 26

billion

pounds

. It slightly decreased afterwards to 24

billion

pounds

in 2013.

Whereas

, people spending money

for

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miscellaneous remained stable not exceeding 3

billion

pounds

. Having a close look

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the graph,

amount

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the amount

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of money people used for

business

and visiting friends or family gradually increased.

Business

rose from approximately 2.8

billion

pounds

to 5

billion

pounds

during the period.

Similarily

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, visiting friends or relatives climbed up steadily from 1

billion

pound

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pounds

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to 5

billion

pounds

which was the same amount as

business

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The line graph illustrates the expenditure of British citizens on four different purposes of visiting abroad (holiday, business, visiting friends or relatives and miscellaneous) from 1993 to 2013.

In many countries, the number of plants and animals are declining. why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehical will be passenger. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing are as important to a child's development as other subjects so it should bes compulsory in high schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some people think a country benefits from a large proportion of young university students, others think sending young people to universities only lead to graduate unemployment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.