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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the
proportion
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 of employees in four
countries
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 who worked in three different industries—
agriculture
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,
industry
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, and
services
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—between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
proportion
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 of
workers
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 in
agriculture
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 and
services
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 decreased in all
countries
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,
while
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 the
industry
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sector
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 experienced growth over the thirty-year period.
Germany
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 led in the
industry
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 and
services
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 sectors,
while
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China
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 had the highest
proportion
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 of
workers
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 in
agriculture
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 in both years. In 1980,
China
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 had the largest percentage of
workers
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 in
agriculture
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, at 70%. In
Germany
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, 60% of the
workforce
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 was employed in
industry
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, and 50% in
services
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—both the highest among the four
countries
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.
Conversely
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, only 5% of
Germany
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’s
workforce
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 was in
agriculture
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,
while
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 40% of
China
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's
workforce
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 was in
industry
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. Japan had 38% of its labour force in
agriculture
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 in 1980. By 2010, the
proportion
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 of
workers
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 in
agriculture
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 in
China
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 had decreased to 50%, but it still remained the highest among the
countries
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.
Germany
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 saw an increase in the
industry
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sector
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, with 82% of its
workforce
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 employed there,
while
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 the
services
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sector
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 declined to 40%.
Agriculture
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 in
Germany
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 dropped to just 2% by 2010. In
China
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, the
services
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sector
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 saw a significant decline from 50% to 22%,
while
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 the
industry
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sector
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also
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 decreased from 40% to 22% in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, countries, industry, workers, agriculture, services, sector, germany, china, workforce with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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