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Interviews are the basic selecting criteria for most companies. However, some people think interviews are not a reliable method and there are better methods. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, every
company's
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followers
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follows
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same
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the same
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 procedure
to select
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for selecting
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 their
employees
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. Few people think an interview is not reliable enough to select
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 are other options for selecting them. I completely disagree with the notion. In
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i
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 shall examine
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 using examples to support my view.
Firstly
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, interviews
allows
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 employers to meet their
employees
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 whether in person or online. They can know each other. It helps
yo
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the
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apply
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companies to find out skilled
employees
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 which
suits
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 best to their needs. A recent study conducted by Cambridge University reported that
,
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apply
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 60-70%
companies
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of companies
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 hire
employees
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 via
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meeting
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in
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pandemic
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 times.
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huge
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 difference.
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, people gain
self confidence
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 with interactions
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 get new experiences from their failures.
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 is because gives them
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 and motivation to get the job and they will do the hard
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work
. Some
of
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people set their
goals
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own goals
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. A survey conducted in India revealed that
,
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 50%
failure
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 person cracked their
highest paid
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 jobs in foreign countries.
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is
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 key to success. In
nutshell
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a nutshell
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, interviews are
common
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a common
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 selection
orocess
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process
 for all companies to meet and greet
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their
theur
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their
employees
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 where they can exchange their thoughts and skills with others

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task achievement
Your introduction is a good start but contains some inaccuracies. Ensure that your language is accurate and polished by reviewing your sentences for grammatical errors. For example, instead of saying 'every company's followers same procedure,' it should be 'every company follows the same procedure.'
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You need to provide more relevant specific examples to support your arguments. While you mention studies and surveys, integrating concrete examples would make your points more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Your essay needs more logical structure and better organization. For instance, subdivide your paragraphs clearly with a clear main point for each paragraph. Transition smoothly between ideas to maintain coherence.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammatical and spelling errors. Incorrect spellings like 'theur' instead of 'their' and 'wark' instead of 'work' can negatively affect readability and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and restates your position, which is a positive aspect of the structure.
task achievement
You have made a commendable attempt to provide examples to support your points, which is crucial for arguing your perspective in an essay.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Selection criteria
  • Candidate assessment
  • Communication skills
  • Problem-solving abilities
  • Situational questions
  • Nervousness
  • Bias/Subjectivity
  • Unconscious biases
  • Practical tests
  • Assessment centers
  • Psychological tests
  • Aptitude tests
  • Work samples
  • Comprehensive measure
  • Suitability for the role
  • Balanced assessment
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