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The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie chart depicts the rates of various households in the UK in 2002 who suffered from
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 of money. From an
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 perspective, it is apparent that the poorest groups were sole parents and single people without
children
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,
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 ratios for the old generation were more positive. Sole parents were the most vulnerable social class in the UK in
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2002 year with a rate of more than a quarter (26%), the same trend referred to single persons without
children
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 with 24%.
Couples
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 with
children
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 are the third unlucky group with a 10% difference in comparison with the latter. All household
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 and
couples
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 with
children
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 had almost the same fractions equalled 14% and 15% respectively.
Couples
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 without
children
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 were more economically solvent than
couples
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 with
children
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 with a small minority of 9%. It is worth emphasizing the other two classes of the people with the most positive data. Obviously, the older generation has
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 more stable financial situation, so portions of poor citizens among aged
couples
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 were 5% and the single aged persons were 7%.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, couples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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