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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison
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The pie chart describes how many college students can speak one, or two foreign languages, or none of the others apart from their mother
language
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 in 2000 and 2010. In general, there were little changes after ten years. some types of
language
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 learners increased and others decreased.
Besides
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, some situations remained the same. More students spoke Spanish in 2000 with the number of 30
percent
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 and it made up the most proportions among the other after 10 years with 35
percent
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.
Likewise
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, people who can speak "Another
language
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" climbed up from 15
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percent
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per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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 to 20
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percent
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per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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.
Moreover
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, native speakers who can speak German or over two foreign languages took up the same figures with 10
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percent
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per cent

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 and they remained the same in 2010. In the case of bilingual speakers who speak French, they accounted for 15
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percent
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per cent

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.
However
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, it decreased to 10
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percent
Change the spelling
per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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 in 2010, and people who can not speak any foreign
language
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 originally comprised 20
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percent
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per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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 and
afterward
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afterwards

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 it fell to the same number as French speakers in 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • converse
  • additional languages
  • language proficiency
  • monolingual
  • multilingualism
  • proficient
  • trend
  • significant changes
  • decade
  • notable increase
  • commonly spoken
  • comparison
  • data reveal
  • observed
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