Interview forms the basic selection criteria for most large companies. However, some people think that interview is not a reliable method of choosing whom to employ and there are other better methods. To what extent do you agree?

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Many companies solely
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on interviews for the hiring of new staff.
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,
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few people believe that there are many other ways of choosing the
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for the company. I wholeheartedly agree with
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stance because
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should
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be hired on
basis
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of academic
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background

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and experience
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that
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particular field.
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with
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, There are enormous ways of selecting an
employe
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employee

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but academic value and professional skill
is
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are

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considered to be on top
most
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priority. It means that the person with high
grades
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in modules or
overall
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degree
have
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has

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utmost
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the utmost

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importance.
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, individual with years of professional experience needs to be included in selection criteria.
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Otherwise
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beginners would be heavily
impact
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on the growth of business.
For example
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, In
banking
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the banking

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sector, beginners from
the
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apply

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top rank
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universities having good
grades
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are to be
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in
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.
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softwear
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software

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house considered only those applicants that have experience of
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more

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than three years in their required skills rather than any degree with good
grades
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. They only focus on
to compete
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competing

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with other big firms in terms of their capability and potential to generate revenue.
Hence
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,
these
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above
reprsentation
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representation

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proves the value of good
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and professional
skill
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skills

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.
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side,
interview
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interviews

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also
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paly
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play

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crucial
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role in
selection
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the selection

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of
an individuals
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individuals
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. their main preference is to evaluate the personality of the candidate. To elaborate
this
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personality
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of the human is somehow
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on
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various parts.
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, marketing agencies preferred to select the individual on interview. They have to assess the
overall
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personality like physical
appearence
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appearance

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, communication skills, and politeness of the
employe
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employee

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.In marketing work physical
appearence
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appearance

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matters
alot
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a lot

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,
hence
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,
this
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is
also
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the
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good way of hiring a person but it limits
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some extent .
To conclude
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Hiring
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process
not
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only concise to interview.
However
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, academic background and skill
also
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play a crucial role
on
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some aspects. They solely
depends
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depend

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on the
requirement
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requirements

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of the companies which
varies
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vary

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from sector to sector.

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You have presented a valid argument and addressed both sides of the issue. However, your essay would be stronger if it included more detailed and varied supporting points.
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Some ideas could be expanded further to fully address the essay prompt. For example, the importance of academic background and professional experience could be supported with more specific examples or references to different industries.
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Your essay has a general logical flow, but some sentences and paragraphs do not transition smoothly. Work on using a variety of cohesive devices to ensure each paragraph connects well to the next.
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While you have an introduction and conclusion, the introduction could be more clearly stated and engaging. Similarly, the conclusion could summarize your main points more effectively to leave a lasting impact.
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Your argument is somewhat coherent, but there are instances where the points could be better supported. Make sure each point is followed by clear and relevant supporting details.
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You have addressed both sides of the issue, which shows good understanding and balance in your argument.
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You have included relevant examples to support your points, which strengthens your argument.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
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  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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