The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The food that we eat
supply
the nutrients that our body needs to survive. There are three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. These are the meals typically consumed in the United States of America. There are Change the verb form
supplies
sodium
, saturated fat, and added sugar
.
Breakfast
, lunch
, and dinner
, we eat three times a day. The average percentage
of sodium
in breakfast
is 14%, in lunch
29%, in dinner
43% and in snacks
there is 14%. Meanwhile, the average percentage
of saturated fat in our breakfast
is 16%, in lunch
26%, in dinner
37% and in snacks
21%. Last
but not least, the average percentage
of of
added Remove the redundancy
apply
sugar
in our breakfast
is 16%, in lunch
19%, in dinner
37% and in the snacks
that we eat 42%.
In conclusion, saturated fat and added sugar
have the same percentage
in breakfast
while
sodium
has only 14%. Sodium
and saturated fat have the same percentage
while
added sugar
only has 19%. In
Change preposition
At
dinner
, sodium
has the highest by
43%. And in Change preposition
apply
snacks
added sugar
has the highest count by 42%. Remember that if we eat too much of these unhealthy nutrients, in the long term it can lead us to healthy
problems Replace the word
health
such
as obesity or heart related
problems.Add a hyphen
heart-related
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