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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The human culture of consumption has evolved in unimaginable ways since the beginning of civilization.
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 hunter-gatherer and agricultural societies incorporated organic ingredients into their plates, modern communities have progressed by involving chemical compounds
into
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 recipes. Nutrients
such
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 as
sodium
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, saturated fats, and added sugars are essential aspects of a regular meal in the USA. The nutritional measurements of these compounds will be the main points of discussion in
this
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 paper as it
dive
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 deeper into the ingredients of everyday meals.
Breakfast
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, typically branded as the most important meal of the day, includes an equal amount of 16% added
sugar
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 and saturated fat. Meanwhile, 14% of
breakfast
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 dishes are infused with
sodium
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 and
increases
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 to 29% in lunch gourmets. It complements the 26% of saturated fat, and both
outweighs
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 the
percentage
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 of added
sugar
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. The same phenomenon is taking place with the
percentage
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 of
sodium
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 and saturated fat in dinner courses, in which each respective nutrients experience an incline from
breakfast
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 and lunch with
the
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apply
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percentage
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percentages
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 of 43% and 37%.
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, the
percentage
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 of added
sugar
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 experienced a decline to 23%.
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, snacks contain a domineering amount of added
sugar
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, weighing up to 42%. In conclusion,
sodium
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 and saturated fat most often balance each other in
breakfast
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, lunch, and dinner courses.
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, added
sugar
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 frequently has an inconsistent
percentage
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 compared to the two other nutrients.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, breakfast, sugar, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • average percentage
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • meal times
  • excessive
  • implications
  • dietary
  • intake
  • macronutrients
  • saturated fats
  • sugars
  • sodium
  • unhealthy
  • proportion
  • variation
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