The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.
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The graph illustrates the number
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billion
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billions
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of people
of
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India
and
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from the year 2000 to today with
prediction
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predictions
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for growth extending to 2050.
Overall
, it is noticeable to see the decreases and increases of
these two country
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this two country
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. During these years,
India
showed very well growth,
while
China
rose until half of
time
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and started to decline. Looking at the graph,
China
had more than 1200 in 2000, compared
India
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it was higher. Nowadays,
China
has over 1, 400,but it predicts that it will fall to 1,400 in 2050.
On the other hand
,
India
had only 1,000 which was lower
in contrast
to
China
. In the present days,
India
soared to 1,400,
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it expects that their number will go up to 1,600 in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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