The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart describes the top
ten
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countries
for producing and consuming Use synonyms
electricity
in 2014. The Use synonyms
ten
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countries
include Asia, Western Use synonyms
countries
, and Europe.
The Top both production and consumption was China which had 5.398 billion kWh of production and 5.322 billion kWh of Consumption in 2014. The second rank is the United States which had too similar difference to China in producing and consuming at that time. Use synonyms
Whereas
, Russia had a little difference in both used and made Linking Words
electricity
10 years ago that had only 19 billion kWh.
The next Use synonyms
countries
from Asia are Japan and India, Use synonyms
then
Canada, France, Brazil and Linking Words
Germany
from European Use synonyms
countries
. Korea Republic was the Use synonyms
last
country in the top Linking Words
ten
rank. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the patterns of producers in China Linking Words
was
the biggest country in the world. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
Nevertheless
, From the third until Linking Words
ten
rank Used Use synonyms
electricity
was low because they would prefer renewable energy.
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In Contrast
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Germany
Used Use synonyms
electricity
more than made it. It would be Use synonyms
deficit
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a deficit
energy
if Change preposition
in energy
this
country didn't use energy wisely. Linking Words
Thus
, Linking Words
Germany
should distribute Use synonyms
electricity
be spread evenly. Because Use synonyms
of
Output more Change preposition
apply
huge
than input Fix the agreement mistake
larger
so that
the government should make Correct word choice
apply
regulation
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regulations
how
to Change preposition
on how
over come
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overcome
this
problem.
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Conclusion
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In conclusion
Distribution
among the top Change preposition
in Distribution
ten
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countries
, Use synonyms
Germany
has Use synonyms
anomali
trend between production and Correct your spelling
anomaly
consumptin
but the other Correct your spelling
consumption
countries
produce significantly more Use synonyms
electricity
than they consume.Use synonyms
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