The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart describes the top
ten
countries
for producing and consuming electricity
in 2014. The ten
countries
include Asia, Western countries
, and Europe.
The Top both production and consumption was China which had 5.398 billion kWh of production and 5.322 billion kWh of Consumption in 2014. The second rank is the United States which had too similar difference to China in producing and consuming at that time. Whereas
, Russia had a little difference in both used and made electricity
10 years ago that had only 19 billion kWh.
The next countries
from Asia are Japan and India, then
Canada, France, Brazil and Germany
from European countries
. Korea Republic was the last
country in the top ten
rank. Moreover
, the patterns of producers in China was
the biggest country in the world. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
Nevertheless
, From the third until ten
rank Used electricity
was low because they would prefer renewable energy.
In Contrast
, Germany
Used electricity
more than made it. It would be deficit
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a deficit
energy
if Change preposition
in energy
this
country didn't use energy wisely. Thus
, Germany
should distribute electricity
be spread evenly. Because of
Output more Change preposition
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than input Fix the agreement mistake
larger
so that
the government should make Correct word choice
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regulation
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how
to Change preposition
on how
over come
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overcome
this
problem.
Conclusion
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In conclusion
Distribution
among the top Change preposition
in Distribution
ten
countries
, Germany
has anomali
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anomaly
consumptin
but the other Correct your spelling
consumption
countries
produce significantly more electricity
than they consume.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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