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The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
proportion
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 of part-time employees in four countries of the United Kingdom (
England
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, Northern
Ireland
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,
Scotland
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 and
Wales
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) in the
year
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years
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 1980 and 2010 respectively. The
overall
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 trend shown in the data was a rise in the
proportion
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 of employees in
England
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 and
Wales
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,
coupled with
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 a decline in Northern
Ireland
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 and
Scotland
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. a greater
proportion
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 of part-time workers in 2010 than in 1980. In 1980, the
England
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 worker's rate was about 25% ,
while
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 in Northern
Ireland
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being
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 lower than
England
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's rate by approximately 10%.
Then
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 it
decline
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 to almost ten
percent
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 in
Scotland
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. the figure showed an increase
to
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 about 35% in
Wales
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. In 2010, the percentage of part-time workers in
England
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 was just over 30% and hitting a
low-point
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 of about 12% in Northern
Ireland
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. the figure rose to approximately 20% in
Scotland
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. There was a higher
proportion
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 of the workers during 2010 in
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wales
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Wales
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 of about 35%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, england, ireland, scotland, wales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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