Task 1: The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the proportion of joblessness in three different countries from 1993 to 2007.  
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
percentage
in
Japan
experienced a significant rise
while
the
UK
saw a decline.
However
, the EU trend indicates a consistent decrease in the unemployment rate over the period.   Looking in more detail at the proportion for
Japan
, the
percentage
began with 2% in 1992 and
then
experienced a gradual rise in
the
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joblessness, which remained constant at 3% between 1995 and 1999, before a peak at roughly 6% in 2003. The
percentage
dropped sharply, reaching 4%
at the end
of the period. In comparison to
Japan
, the
UK
showed a dramatic fall from 11% in 1993 to a consistent 5% in 2001. There was a
slightly
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rise in the number of people who are without jobs in the
UK
, comprising 6% in 2007.
In contrast
, individuals who are out of work in the rest of Europe began
with
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9% and peaked at 11% before declining steadily to approximately 8%
at
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the given period. The
percentage
of unemployment
for
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the EU was significantly higher than that in the
UK
,
even
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Japan
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, japan, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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