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The world of work is changing rapidly and employees cannot depend on having the same job or the same working conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes for this rapid change, and suggest ways of preparing people for the world of work in the future. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Over the decades the world has been changing significantly and individuals are concerned that their positions at
work
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 might shift into a situation that they do not like. Nowadays new machines and tools are invented in order to ease the tasks for
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 these advancements,
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 positions in
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work
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the work
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 environment are
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in danger.
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 of
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, there are solutions. Examining the reasons, the most common is that modern devices are being invented by
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scientists.
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 but they are
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 a good job from them.
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, recently a robot called Celin had been generated in order to be used for the tasks that are done by
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. These robots can talk, walk and even process data better
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human
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 with them in the markets
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 hire
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 to
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 for them. Another major problem is that machines
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 washing machines are being replaced with human abilities.
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, in modern society
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cares
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cars
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 are being washed with automated car washes,
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use
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 is no doubt that
technology
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 development is affecting
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man kind
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 and
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 should be done about it.
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, to combat the issue, some productive steps can help to overcome
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large
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 extent. The foremost one is that companies can offer extra courses to their employees
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 programming
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 to improve their abilities and catch up with technology developments.
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 government should change the subjects in schools
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global improvement. Some subjects like introduction to artificial intelligence must be added to their timetables. These courses will build a student's base for the feature demands in
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 there are several issues
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 the
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 environment shifts,
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 taking steps
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 skills and changing the education methods in schools can solve the problems to
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 extent.

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The introduction sets up the essay topic well, highlighting the rapid changes in the work environment and their implications.
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The conclusion effectively summarises the main points discussed in the essay and reiterates the potential solutions.
complete response
You have addressed both parts of the task by discussing reasons for the changes in the work environment and suggesting ways to prepare for the future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Robotics
  • Globalization
  • Outsourcing
  • Freelance work
  • Flexibility
  • Job Security
  • Education reform
  • Critical thinking
  • Adaptability
  • Continuous education
  • Retraining programs
  • Legislation
  • Corporate responsibility
  • Competitive edge
  • Work-life balance
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