The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts provide the percentage of the public sector employed by dividing them into five
age
categories in the UK from 2015 to 2020.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the proportion for 21 to 30 and over 50 was similar to each other in 2015,
while
the former saw
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an incease
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incease
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increase
increases
in 2020 and the latter experienced
decline
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a decline
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. A
noteable
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notable
noticeable
feature of the data is the dramatic growth in the 41 to 50
age
group,
whereas
people
under 21 represented a slight rise by 2020. Looking in more detail, in 2015 the workforce was dominated by two
age
groups, 21 to 30 and over 50, at 23% of the total. Followed by
people
aged 31 to 40, with 21%. The figure for individuals who are from 41 to 50 was less than 20%,
finally
, the rate of
people
who are under 21 years old and have jobs in the public sector was roughly 14%. In terms
to
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of
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the ratio of staff employed in 2020, the
majortiy
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majority
of them
was
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were
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from
21
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the 21
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to 30
age
category, accounting
33
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for 33
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% of the sum. There was a sharp growth of
people
working from
age
41 to 50, comprising 28%,
whereas
all other three categories had
plunge
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a plunge
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of
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the percentage.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.

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