The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pictures provide key information about the changes in the village named Kelsbey, between the years 1780 and 2000
Overall
, the farmland and the woods areas have been decrease.
While
the total number of houses in the village and
schools
increase in the next 120 years. First of all, the number of
homes
expanded from 100
homes
in 1780 to more than 190 houses in 1860, ending up with 4 times the number of houses in 1780 at the beginning of the 21st.
However
, the forest had a dramatically lost area in 1860
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and got empty to build
schools
and sports fields in their area.
On the other hand
، the population continued to grow until 2000, reaching 400
homes
and they needed to teach their children, so they cut off the trees
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and destroyed the farmland to make
schools
and roads from the
homes
to the
schools
and the river. Meanwhile, they lost their food resource after cutting the farms, so they built stores to bring their food from the outside.
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