Improvement in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nation in such area. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The status of any
country
can be easily identified through the different indicators of the nation where health, education and economic trade are
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of the main
factor
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that represent the
country
's portfolio. It is undeniable that support from
the
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developed
country
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countries
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to
under developed
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underdeveloped
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and
developnig
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developing
countries
can have
the
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significant improvement
of
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the
wolrd
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world
. In
this
essay, the reasons why low economic
countries
should be unveiled and the visible way will be expressed. In my opinion, support from the developed
countries
can rapidly increase the positive improvement in
healtth
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health
, education and
overall
economic
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economy
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of the
under developed
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underdeveloped
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countries
.
Firstly
, financial
fund
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funds
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and non-financial
suppport
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support
from
the
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healthy
countries
can
minize
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minimise
the cost of the poor
country
where
under
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apply
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developed
country
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countries
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don't have to
spent
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money on these
facilites
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facilities
as
it
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they
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will be funded.
This
is
beacause
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because
the richer nation itself
seggregate
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segregate
aggregate
the fund for the donation and helping other nations.
As a result
, poorer
countries
also
can be
facilited
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facilitated
with the help of donating and funded
countries
which helps to increase the living standard of the
under
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developed
countries
. Apart from that, supporting in trade of poorer can directly increase the economic conditions of the nation and it can be done through the different
agreement
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agreements
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between the nations like charging less tax and providing
duty free
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products to that particular
country
.
As a consequence
,
poorer
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the poorer
a poorer
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country
can improve their condition of the
country
and save some budget which can be utilized
in
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different
purpose
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purposes
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. All in all, it can have better essentials things is
a
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beneficial for
whole
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the whole
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world. To
eluciate
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elucidate
, equal
opportunites
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opportunities
of
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for
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health , education and economy
is
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the basic things which
is
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are
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needed for every individual of each
country
across the globe so we need to
encouge
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encourage
everyone to support each other for the development of
whole
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the whole
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globe.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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