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The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The percentage of employed
men
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 and women aged 60-64 in four countries in 1970 and 2000 is shown in the chart below. Overview, Japan seemed to have the most employed
men
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 in the 70's. The USA had the least amount of employed
men
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 during that time.
On the other hand
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, Japan
also
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 had the biggest percentages of working women out of all countries,
while
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 Belgium had the least amount of employed women. Japan had about eighty-five
percent
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per cent
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 of the
men
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 in employment in the
70,s
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70s
. Later
on
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 it decreased to only seventy-four
percent
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per cent
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. The USA and Belgium had about more than

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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