The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The percentage of employed
men
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and women aged 60-64 in four countries in 1970 and 2000 is shown in the chart below. Overview, Japan seemed to have the most employed
men
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in the 70's. The USA had the least amount of employed
men
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during that time.
On the other hand
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, Japan
also
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had the biggest percentages of working women out of all countries,
while
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Belgium had the least amount of employed women. Japan had about eighty-five
percent
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per cent
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of the
men
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in employment in the
70,s
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70s
. Later
on
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it decreased to only seventy-four
percent
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. The USA and Belgium had about more than
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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