The pie chart illustrates the percentage of employment staff aged in the public sector in the United Kingdom in the years 2015 and 2020.

The pie chart illustrates the percentage of employment staff aged in the public sector in the United Kingdom in the years 2015 and 2020.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart illustrates the percentage of employment staff aged in the public sector in the United Kingdom in the years 2015 and 2020.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of employment
staff
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aged in the public sector in the United Kingdom in the
years
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2015 and 2020.
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, the highest ratio in the pie chart is between 21 and 30
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old in 2020, whilst the lawless percentage of employed
staff
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was from 31 to 40 in the year 2020, in 2015
staff
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aged 21 to 30 and over 50 maintained the same proportion. In detail, people under 21
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old were the most lit ratio in 2015 with 14 per cent but in 2020 it dropped to 12%,
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age 21 to 30
staff
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was 23% in 2015, after
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it raised 10% more in 2020 and stuff from age 31 to 40 had a hurriedly decreased they
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21% and became 11%. The remaining two categories are people aged 41 to 50 and over 50, employed
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aged between 41 and 50 they had increased by about 9% between the two
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,
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, people over 50
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had dropped from 23 per cent to 16 per cent with approximately 7% gap in 2020.

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