The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the number of employments in four different industries, namely services, manufacturing, energy and construction, and agriculture, between 1910 and 2010 in the UK.
Overall
, there was an upward trend
of
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employee
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the employee
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level.
Whereas
the left 3 industries, agriculture, energy and construction, and
manufaturing
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manufacturing
, were
a
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downtrend. Beginning, The
amount
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number
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of workers in
services
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the services
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business stood at about 4
million
in 1910. After that, it climbed to 10
million
in 1930, which is
highest
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in all four sectors, and dramatically increased to above a little 20
million
at the end
of
period
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.
In contrast
,
employment
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level in manufacturing was dominant
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all
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of market which was about 5
million
in 1910,
then
it slightly changed in 1930
at
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6
million
people.
While
1950 experienced a peak
of
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manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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sector
about
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8
million
employees and
considerable
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decline from 1950 to 2010, at which point it was below a little bit than 5
million
. Employee levels in energy
and
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construction and agriculture sectors have similar
pattern
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patterns
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, at the start of the period, there were 3 and 2
million
people in these businesses, respectively. Since 1910, the number of
employments
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employees
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had slightly decreased to approximately 2 and 1
million
in both sectors (respectively) in 2010.
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