The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words.
The table depicts the difference in
proportion
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the proportion
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of the population aged
from
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65 and above in three
various
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regions . It is clear from the graph that the rate of population who aged above 65 reached the highest in Germany compared with other nations during the period shown
while
the percentage of people who above 65 years ranked the
lowes
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in the UK .
According to
what is shown . In
Canada
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Canada,
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the
ration
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ratio
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of people who has 65
year
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years
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was at 16 .32
in1988
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in 1988
and will
be increase
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to26
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to 26
in 2030.
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the
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other
word
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, in 1988 the figure
of
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individuals who had 65
about
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20 .45
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20.45
and will jump to 30. 42 in 2030 in Germany region
while
the
uk
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UK
became
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the
lowes
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lowest
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rate of
population
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the population
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above 65 years in 1988
additionally
, there was a little difference in
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the ratio
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for people above 65 by 2000 .
However
, the percentage will grow to 20.35 in 2030 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • population aged 65 and above
  • current figures
  • evident trends
  • patterns
  • increases
  • decreases
  • rates of change
  • growth rate
  • predictions
  • future changes
  • significant shifts
  • figures
  • summarize
  • comparison
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