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The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each categories from five organisations in 2015. Summarise the information bu selecting and reporting the main features, and make conparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each categories from five organisations in 2015. Summarise the information bu selecting and reporting the main features, and make conparison where relevant.
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This
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 bar chart illustrates how much cash was invested in each
categore
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category
, from five organisations,
orgnisation
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organisations
 A,
B
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, C, D, and
E
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, in 2015.
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, it appears that
orgnisation
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organisation
B
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 is the highest, and both D
,
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 and
E
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 are the lowest. Getting into more
detailed
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, A apparently put most of their money on Staff Training,
B
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 put it on Buildings, C was equal for both Machinery and Research, D on Buildings,
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,
E
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 is
same
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 as D and
B
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.
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,
B
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spend
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 around 17
Bilion
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billion
Euroes
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Euros
in
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 their maximum
investments
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investment
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 division,
in
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 the other hand, D, and
E
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 spent the same, which is only 0.5,
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, A gave 1
bilion
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billion
, and for C it
is
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was
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 0.6 but for
two
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the two
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orgnisations
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organisations
 together.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words b, e with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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