The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts compare the percentage of employees from five
age
groups in the UK's public sector in 2015 and 2020.
Overall
, there was an increase
of
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proportion in the 21-30 and 41-50
age
groups
whereas
the other three categories had a downward trend. People
aging
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from 21-30 allocated just below a quarter in 2015.
This
percentage
then
increased to almost one-third
at the end
of the period.
Likewise
, employees in the older group (aged 41-50) began with 19%
,
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and rose to 28% in 2020.
In contrast
, staff aged above 50 shared the same number of people with
the
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young adults (aged 21-30) in 2015, but
this
number dropped to just above 15% in 2020. Younger
age
employees who are below 21 had the lowest share of
employee
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in 2015 with only 14% and
this
share dropped slightly to 12% in 2020. Staff around the
age
of 31-40 had the biggest decline over the period given,
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with
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21% and
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11%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • public sector
  • employment trends
  • age demographics
  • experienced professionals
  • demand for stability
  • employment proportion
  • retirement trends
  • policy changes
  • value experience
  • age brackets
  • consistent demand
  • notable decrease/increase
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