WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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number
of
education
For
man
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men
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and women between
full
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full-time
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time
education
and
part
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part-time
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time
education
in
Britian
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Britain
from 1970 to 1990. As can be seen, In
full
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full-time
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time
education
get
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gets
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a
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the
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highest
number
over three years.
whil
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while
, in the
Part
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Part-time
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time
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education
deducation
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deducation,
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has
Less
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Fewer
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Points.
It is clear that
,
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apply
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In
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apply
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male
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males
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were fluctuate
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fluctuated
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in numbers. In 1970/71
thir
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their
is
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it
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increased to 1000, It
were
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was
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a
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the
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highest
number
.
whil
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while
, in 1980/81 it
were
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was
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decreased in to higher than 800 werd
Less
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Fewer
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points.
However
, in 1990/91
number
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the number
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of
full
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full-time
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time
education
grow to
nerly
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nearly
900.
In addition
,
number
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a number
the number
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of
Part
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Part-time
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time
minise
in
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from
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1970/71 to 1990/91
rise
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rose
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from 1 to 200
person
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people
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.
on the other hand
, In
Female
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Females
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were
climb
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climbing
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gradually. In 1970 were
number
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the number
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of
full
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full-time
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time
education
around 700.
whil
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while
, in 1980 go up to under 800.
However
,
thir
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there
were
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was
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a
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the
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highest
people
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number of people
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in 1990 around 1100 .
Moreover
, in
Part
time
.
education
thir
were
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was
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nerly
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nearly
same
number
in 1980 and 1990.
whil
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while
, In 1970 were Less Point around 1.
To sum up
, we could say that
full
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full-time
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time
education
thir
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their
were
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was
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increased over the years
whil
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while
in
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apply
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part
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part-time
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time
education
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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decreased.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, education, time, part, whil, thir with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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