The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in

 1993 and 2003.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates the trend in the difficulties in finding various sorts of
workers
in four different sectors, namely manufacturing, building, commerce and services in 2003 and 2004.
Overall
, it was most challenging to employ skilled
workers
in all sectors
whereas
the figure for technical and managerial
workers
was the lowest in both years.
Firstly
, it is hard to employ
skillful
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labours
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labourers
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in all sorts of
works
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work
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. Especially, the number for manufacturing in 2004 was more than
a
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half, which is
the
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top of the table.
In addition
, it was least challenging in services in 2003 despite
this
was
also
more than 40%. Another point to note is that recruiting technical and administrative
workers
was relatively easier than the other types of
workers
.
In particular
, 0% of difficulty was recorded in the commerce section in 2004,
while
the highest figure was observed in the building industry in 2003, which was 14%.
However
,
this
was only a third of the lowest number in recruiting skilled
workers
approximately.
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