The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. 

summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustrations demonstrate the life
process
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of the silkworm and the phases in the manufacture of
silk
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material.
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, the life cycle is a natural
process
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consisting of four cyclical phases, beginning with the moth laying eggs and ending with the birth of a new moth from a cocoon. The production of
silk
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cloth is a rather man-made linear
process
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entailing 6 stages. To start with, the moth lays eggs which take 10 days to hatch into silkworm larvae that feed on mulberry leaves.
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is followed by a period of 4 to 6 weeks where the worms
contruct
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construct
contract
silk
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thread before forming a cocoon taking approximately a week. They stay there
around
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a fortnight,
subsequently
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emerging as new moths and the
process
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repeats itself. The first stage in the manufacture of
silk
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cloth is the selection of cocoon which is
then
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boiled. After that, the
silk
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thread is unwound
upto
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up to
a length between 300 and 900 metres.
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, the thread is
then
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twisted or woven before being dyed.
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