The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts provide key information about people who got arrested in the UK between 2015 and 2020. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the
males
led the number of arrested people by 32%.
In addition
,
males
who are not arrested are 68%,
whereas
the females are less than the guys by 31% more.
According to
what is shown, the
males
Change to a genitive case
male's
males'
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sector
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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68% of people who got arrested because of
drink
Replace the word
drunk
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driving or theft,
males
led other reasons to be arrested
section
be
Correct your spelling
by
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almost 1%,
whereas
they less than the
womens
Correct your spelling
women's
women
by nearly 7% in public intoxication. In terms of
womens
Correct your spelling
women
women's
, they led the public intoxication by 37% more than
males
by 7%,
otherwise
Add a comma
otherwise,
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they are less than the
men
by almost 5% in
Correct article usage
the drink
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drink
Wrong verb form
drunk
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driving
section
and more than
men
in
assault
Correct article usage
the assault
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section
by almost 20% and for the
men
near to 15% but,
womens
Correct your spelling
women
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are less than the
men
in breaking and entering
section
by 4%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, section, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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