The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts provide key information about people who got arrested in the UK between 2015 and 2020. The units are measured in numbers.

Overall

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, it is clear from the graph that the

males

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led the number of arrested people by 32%.

In addition

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males

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who are not arrested are 68%,

whereas

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the females are less than the guys by 31% more.

According to

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what is shown, the

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males

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male's

males'

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sector

have

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has

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68% of people who got arrested because of

drink

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drunk

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driving or theft,

males

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led other reasons to be arrested

section

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almost 1%,

whereas

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they less than the

womens

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women's

women

by nearly 7% in public intoxication. In terms of

womens

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women

women's

, they led the public intoxication by 37% more than

males

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by 7%,

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otherwise

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otherwise,

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they are less than the

men

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by almost 5% in

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the drink

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drink

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drunk

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driving

section

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and more than

men

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assault

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the assault

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section

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by almost 20% and for the

men

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near to 15% but,

womens

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women

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are less than the

men

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in breaking and entering

section

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by 4%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, section, men with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

167 words

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