The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts provide key information about people who got arrested in the UK between 2015 and 2020. The units are measured in numbers.

Overall

, it is clear from the graph that the

males

led the number of arrested people by 32%.

In addition

males

who are not arrested are 68%,

whereas

the females are less than the guys by 31% more.

According to

what is shown, the

males

Change to a genitive case

male's

males'

show examples

sector

have

Correct subject-verb agreement

has

show examples

68% of people who got arrested because of

drink

Replace the word

drunk

show examples

driving or theft,

males

led other reasons to be arrested

section

Correct your spelling

show examples

almost 1%,

whereas

they less than the

womens

Correct your spelling

women's

women

by nearly 7% in public intoxication. In terms of

womens

Correct your spelling

women

women's

, they led the public intoxication by 37% more than

males

by 7%,

otherwise

Add a comma

otherwise,

show examples

they are less than the

men

by almost 5% in

Correct article usage

the drink

show examples

drink

Wrong verb form

drunk

show examples

driving

section

and more than

men

assault

Correct article usage

the assault

show examples

section

by almost 20% and for the

men

near to 15% but,

womens

Correct your spelling

women

show examples

are less than the

men

in breaking and entering

section

by 4%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, section, men with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

167 words

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