The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart below illustrates the distribution of free
time
based on gender and employment between 1980 and 1981. It is clearly seen that the leisure
time
never exceeded 85 and not below 38
overall
categories . First, we can notice full-
time
time
employees have the lowest free
time
among others
due to
their nine hours of working weekly and don't have
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much
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such
time
for fun .
Also
, part-
time
working females reached 40 of spare
time
which was almost the same as full-
time
. Second , unemployed and retired were the group that had
such
time
for Gym, swimming, and reading and reached the highest that it had ever been.
Last
but not least , the most interesting fact is that housewives only had 50 enjoyable times which is higher by 10 compared to full and part-
time
females.
To sum up
, full and part-
time
time
workers had the lowest
time
to spend on themself than others.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • employment status
  • full-time employment
  • part-time employment
  • unemployed
  • retired
  • housewives
  • gender comparison
  • notable differences
  • allocate time
  • trend analysis
  • work-life balance
  • time management
  • societal norms
  • economic factors
  • gender-specific trends
  • employment transition
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