The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan
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The given pie charts
illustrates
the proportion of Change the verb form
illustrate
time
spend
by working Change the form of the verb
spent
professional
in different activities in 1958 and 2008.
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professionals
Overall
, it can seen that a
majority of Correct article usage
the
time
was Correct article usage
the time
spend
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spent
in
working in both years, Change preposition
apply
whereas
, a small amount of time
was spend
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spent
while
travel for work in 1958.
To begin
with, In 1958, more than a third of Correct article usage
the times
times
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time
people
were working and sleeping. While
,
exactly 8% of Remove the comma
apply
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the times
times
they were relaxing at home. Slightly less than a fifth of Fix the agreement mistake
time
time
they went out with their family and friends. Correct article usage
the time
However
, only 6% of time
was given Add an article
the time
for
playing sports.
In 2008, more than Change preposition
to
a
40% of Correct article usage
apply
time
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the time
people
were working, and for a quarter of Add an article
the time
time
they were sleeping.
Only 13% of Add a comma
time,
time
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the time
were
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was
spend
by adults Change the form of the verb
spent
in
relaxing at home. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, exactly 8% of time
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the time
people
prefers
to play sports and other activities. Change the verb form
prefer
A
same proportion of Correct article usage
The
time
was spend
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spent
in
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apply
while
traveling
for work. Change the spelling
travelling
Furthermore
, only 5% of time
was given by Add an article
the time
people
for going out with family and friends.Submitted by merujain2221 on
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