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The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. as

The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. as
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The picture below illustrates the proportion of
household
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households
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 in rented and owned housing in England and Wales in a period of thirty years.
Overall
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, the percentage of
households
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in
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apply
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renting
accommodation
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 significantly declined than owning over the period shown. In 1918 the percentage of
households
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 renting
accommodation
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 in England and Wales was respectively 75% which was the highest proportion
whereas
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 owning was 25% which was the lowest one. Until 1971 percentage of
households
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 were in the same state as was before,
however
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 after some time rented housing gradually declined
although
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 owned
accommodation
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 increased. In the middle of
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periods
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period
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 renting and owning were 50% either. Afterwards between 1981 to 2011 years
households
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in owning
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owned
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 slightly
grow
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grew
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almost
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by almost
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 70%.
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However
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However,
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 by these times rented
accommodation
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 decreased
until
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to
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 30% and got bigger to 35% by 2011.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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