The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. as

The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. as
The picture below illustrates the proportion of
household
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households
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in rented and owned housing in England and Wales in a period of thirty years.
Overall
, the percentage of
households
in
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renting
accommodation
significantly declined than owning over the period shown. In 1918 the percentage of
households
renting
accommodation
in England and Wales was respectively 75% which was the highest proportion
whereas
owning was 25% which was the lowest one. Until 1971 percentage of
households
were in the same state as was before,
however
after some time rented housing gradually declined
although
owned
accommodation
increased. In the middle of
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periods
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renting and owning were 50% either. Afterwards between 1981 to 2011 years
households
in owning
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slightly
grow
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almost
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70%.
However
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by these times rented
accommodation
decreased
until
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30% and got bigger to 35% by 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, accommodation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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