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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided charts compare the proportion of labourers in the field of
agriculture
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,
industry
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 and services in four countries:
Germany
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, the United States (US),
Japan
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, and
China
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, both in 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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,
China
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 has the highest number in
agriculture
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, whilst
Germany
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 remains the least contributor in
this
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 field;
then
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 after 30 years,
Germany
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's
industry
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 experiences a considerable increase,
although
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 its enthusiasm for
agriculture
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 keeps falling. Looking at the whole data, it can be seen that
Industry
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 is always the most popular occupation for people in the given years. In 1980,
China
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's
agriculture
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sector
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 had a significant quantity of workers at around 70%,
while
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this
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sector
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 was not an attractive choice for three other countries.
Moreover
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, the
industry
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sector
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 secured the first position in
Germany
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, accounting for 60%. Followed by the USA and
Japan
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 which shared similar percentages at approximately 50% and
China
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 at 40%.
Furthermore
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, services in
Germany
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, the USA and
China
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 remained at the same figure at virtually 50%, with
Japan
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 merely having just below 40%.
On the other hand
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, in 2010, it is obvious that the
industry
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sector
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 had a considerable growth of participants, reaching nearly 80% in
Germany
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 and
Japan
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;
then
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 tailed by the USA at 70% and
China
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 at 40%.
However
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, the two other employments underwent downturns.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, industry, germany, japan, china, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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