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Recent research has shown that within the European Union the largest difference between the earnings of men and women exists in the UK. Many equal rights campaigners believe that immediate action should be taken to close the gender pay gap. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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The bar chart provides key information about
sales
 of
games
 globally like,
DVD
,
CDs
 and video. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that
CDs
 are the highest selling items in all years.
In addition
, in 2000, the charts demonstrate that
CDs
 have a significant impact on
sales
,
whereas
 the
games
 software had
a
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 tiniest effect at 10$.
According to
 what is shown, the bar charts demonstrate
the
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 all years were
an
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equivalent numbers of
sales
. In 2001, as I mentioned above
the
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CDs
,
were
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 the highest rate of
sales
,
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 the
DVD
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had
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 a slightly lower ratio at 21 dollars. In terms of 2002, the
DVD
 was slightly higher at 28$.
Then
 the
games
 software has the moderated number of
sales
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at
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19$.
While
 in 2003, the
DVD
 was significantly achieved at 31$ ,
while
 the same
of
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CDs
 roughly at 33$.
Thus
, the
games
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 software was still the lowest rated at 19$.
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The essay provides a clear description of the overall trend shown in the bar chart.
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The essay breaks down sales for each year and makes relevant comparisons.

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