The pie charts below describe the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts Compare four categories of shopping seals between the years 2003 and 2013 in New Zealand.
Overall
, as can be seen, highest
number of people Add an article
the highest
were
love travelled seals shopping. Unnecessary verb
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while
fewer people were buy
clothes . Change the verb form
were buying
However
film and books were nearly the same Add a comma
However,
percentage
in two years.
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percentages
It is clear that
in 2003, most of the people prefer
shopping by Wrong verb form
preferred
travelled
it was around 36%. Wrong verb form
travelling
In addition
, cloth type was a significant point than
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in
years
2013, had a third personage of spending . Correct article usage
the years
However
music and books had nearly the same figure from 19 to 21% of seals .
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However,
On the other hand
, In 2003, film and music had a bigger shift than before around nearly 33%. Secondly
travel and book had Add a comma
Secondly,
the
similar patterns from 29% to 22% of online shopping . Correct article usage
apply
While
a fewer peoples were prefer
buy cloth around a fifth personage.Change the verb form
were preferred
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