The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of skill cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of skill cloth.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Given are two diagrams illustrating the
silkworm
life cycle and the five phases involved in
silk
cloth production. As shown in the
silkworm
life cycle graphic, the first stage is the moth leaves its eggs on the leaf,
secondly
, after 10 days, the eggs become
silkworm
larvae and eat mulberry leaves as food sources, the following
step
, after 4 to 6 weeks, the larva makes
silk
thread and live in there, the fourth stage, after 3 to 8 days, the
silk
thread turn into the
cocoon
,
finally
, after 16 days, the worm breaks out of the
cocoon
and turns into a moth,
that is
the life cycle of the
silkworm
. Another picture gives information about the production of
silk
cloth, at
the first
step
is to select a
cocoon
,
the next
step
is to boil it in water, the third
step
is to unwind the boiled
cocoon
into threads lengths of 300 to 900 meters, and the fourth
step
os twists the threads, and the
last
step
, weaves the twisted threads as
silk
cloth,
besides
, in these
last
two steps, you can dye it to any colour you want.
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