Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. af

The pie chart gives information about methods of transportation for

paeople

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people

traveling

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travelling

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to university in 2004 and 2009 in the UK

Overall

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there are two

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year

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years

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where

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when

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, how people

could

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can

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travel to their location.

For

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example

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example,

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it is how the

percentage

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was increased or decreased.

The

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In the

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first

year

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the

people

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number of people

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who

walking

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walked

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was 4 per

cent

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. Actually,

the

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in the

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second

year

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the

percentage

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was

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apply

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decreased.

That

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is mean

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means

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that the transport user is decreased.

The next step is

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transportation. In 2004 car categories

was

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were

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51 per

cent

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. So

this

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is the

bigger

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biggest

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percentage

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apply

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this

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year

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. Bus proportion was more than bicycle and

trian

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train

. The smallest transport proportion

was train

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was trained

was training

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. It is 3 per

cent

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That is

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because car

user

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users

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was

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had

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the highest

percentage

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. Just walking process was less than

the

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apply

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last

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year

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Also

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cars proportion too. Over the time period shown

year

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’s bus categories were more

that

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than

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tye

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the

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others and the 2004

year

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. Bus

percentage

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was 46 per

cent

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and they are increased in the 2004

year

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That is

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because the transport user was lowest. Because the car or train’s

prise

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price

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was the highest one.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, percentage, cent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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186 words

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university
work
study
year
2004
2009
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bicycle
bike
bus
walk
walking
car
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part
rise
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compare
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overall
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cycle lane
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