Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. af

Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK.

 The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. af
The pie chart gives information about methods of transportation for
paeople
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people
traveling
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travelling
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to university in 2004 and 2009 in the UK
Overall
there are two
year
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years
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where
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when
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, how people
could
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can
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travel to their location.
For
example
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example,
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it is how the
percentage
was increased or decreased.
The
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In the
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first
year
the
people
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number of people
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who
walking
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walked
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was 4 per
cent
. Actually,
the
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in the
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second
year
the
percentage
was
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decreased.
That
is mean
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means
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that the transport user is decreased.
The next step is
transportation. In 2004 car categories
was
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were
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51 per
cent
. So
this
is the
bigger
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biggest
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percentage
in
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apply
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this
year
. Bus proportion was more than bicycle and
trian
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train
. The smallest transport proportion
was train
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was trained
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. It is 3 per
cent
.
That is
because car
user
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users
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was
Verb problem
had
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the highest
percentage
. Just walking process was less than
the
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apply
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last
year
.
Also
cars proportion too. Over the time period shown
year
’s bus categories were more
that
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than
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tye
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the
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others and the 2004
year
. Bus
percentage
was 46 per
cent
and they are increased in the 2004
year
.
That is
because the transport user was lowest. Because the car or train’s
prise
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price
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was the highest one.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, percentage, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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