The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
The illustration depicts the portion of four countries'
export
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exports
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in Australia in the span of 22
years
; from 1990 to 2012. China has the increasing
trend
number of
export
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exports
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,
while
India
almost consistently gained the lowest.
To begin
with, among the four nations, China started as the lowest exporter with less than 5% second to
India
in the starting
year
with about a
percent
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per cent
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.
However
, it showed an upward
trend
every five
years
and skyrocketed to 30% on its
last
year
, which is more than a quarter from the first
year
.
Although
China experienced an upward
trend
, it was evident that Japan
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the highest portion out of the other nations in the beginning
year
with more than 25%, but dramatically
plumetted
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plummeted
for the next
years
with less than a fifth in
year
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the year
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2012.
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goes
to
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for
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US
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the US
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, where in the first
year
has one in ten.
Then
slightly dropped to less than 10% after five
years
, and recovered to
same
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the same
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starting number. Despite the rise, it still sank to following
years
until the
last
year
with more than one in twenty, which is
a
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half on its starting
year
.
On the other hand
,
India
has the lowest recorded export as evidenced
on
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in
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the starting
year
with barely a
percent
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per cent
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. Though
,
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it showed a slight increase
to
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in
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its
trend
, the other three countries
dominates
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over
than
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India
. It peaked just in
year
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the year
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2010 with fairly more than 5%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, trend, india, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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