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The best way to reduce traffic congestion in cities is to provide a free public transport service. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion with examples.

Traffic
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a
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everday
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everyday
 problem for local to worldwide people traveling
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 that an average
perosn
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person
spend
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 about two hours per day in
jam
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. Governments and control units are trying their best to handle everyday growing congestion with new road plans and solutions.
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 suggested way is to make the transportation system free of cost.
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, I believe that
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 is not
only
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 way that can bring
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 high
traffic
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 congestion on
road
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the road
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 down enough with notable
difference
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hence
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 I disagree with the point of free
tansit
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transit
. First of all, it is important to note that there are not a lot of people who are not using government buses for some charges it is because of the preference of having their own vehicle, using it
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 their preference and time when they want even if it is actually more expensive way than that of the public transportation system.
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, I, myself bought a car because it is more convenient even when it
bring
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 me more expenses than that of transit which I was using for
day to day
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 travel.
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, it can seen that
only
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reducing prices can only be
benefical
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beneficial
 to some extent
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.
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, free transportation can actually bring more
jam
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 as more and more people will start
traveling
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travelling
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to get
benefit
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the benefit
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 of no cost
governement
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government
 services. which automatically will
rise
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raise
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 the need to get more
automobile
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automobiles
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 on
road
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.
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zero expense
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 travel will surge
number
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a number
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 of
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the traveler
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traveler
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travelers
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increasing
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in
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demand
of
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for
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 more number of automobile to cope
up
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with
demad
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demand
.
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, it can be said that no cost can actually boost more
expliotation
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exploitation
 of public services than actually solving
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the problemof
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problemof
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problem of
 congestion. In conclusion, I think free
transpotation
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transportation
 is affected to
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some extent
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. To plunge the
Traffic
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 with high
diffrence
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difference
 more practical ideas and
plannd
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planned
 solutions from
traffic
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 control centres is required.

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Task Response
Your essay addresses the question but could benefit from more depth and clarity. Consider expanding on different views about free public transport and its effects on traffic congestion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay displays some logical organization, with an introduction and a conclusion. However, the essay would benefit from clearer transitions between ideas and better paragraph development.
Task Response
Try to include more specific and relevant examples to support your points. This will help strengthen your arguments and illustrate your ideas more effectively.
Task Achievement
Focus on making your main ideas clearer and more comprehensive. Ensure that each paragraph has a distinct controlling idea and that these are well supported.
Task Response
You've made a clear stance on the issue and maintained this position throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay includes both an introduction and a conclusion, which bookend your discussion well.
Task Response
You provide personal insight and examples, which can make your argument more relatable.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transport
  • commuting
  • environmentally friendly
  • vehicles
  • emissions
  • well-planned
  • infrastructure
  • traffic management
  • carpooling
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