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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The data displays how mobile and landline phone was subscribed per hundred citizens in four nations from 2005 to 2015. Mobile subscriptions in Uruguay and India show
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overall
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an overall
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 increase,
while
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UK
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the UK
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 and Eritrea
remain
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remained
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 constant over the decade.
On the other hand
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, fixed telephone
subscriber
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subscribers
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 in four regions are relatively
same
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the same
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 every year.
Firstly
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,
UK’s
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the UK’s
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subscriber
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subscribers
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 slightly rose up
before
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apply
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in 2007
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and become
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become
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became
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 stagnant until 2015. Eritrea
also
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 showed relative stagnancy around 125 over
10-year
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a 10-year
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 period starting from 2005. Meanwhile, India and Uruguay displayed
increase
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an increase
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, peaked up to about 150 in 2013 and around 80 in 2014, respectively.
Conversely
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, the number of people subscribed
fixed
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to fixed
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phone
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phones
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 are comprehensively lower than mobile phone users, which is only about 60
belonged
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belonging
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 to
UK
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the UK
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, and reduced to just above 50 in 2015. The number of
subscriber
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subscribers
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 in Uruguay occurred
slight
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a slight
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 decrease until 2011, and
small
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a small
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 escalation until 2015, reached up to above 30.
However
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, Eritrea and India
are
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were
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 relatively constant from 2005 to 2015,
ranged
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ranging
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 about 0 – 5.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subscriptions
  • mobile phone
  • fixed phone lines
  • trends
  • increases
  • decreases
  • comparisons
  • features
  • noticeable
  • patterns
  • socio-economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • anomalies
  • highest
  • lowest
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