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The chart below shows the promotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarise and write the information in about 150 words making relevant comparisons

The chart below shows the promotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarise and write the information in about 150 words making relevant comparisons
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The pie charts depict the share of British students at
a
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 English university in England that were capable of speaking other languages
as well as
 English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, the ratio of speakers who speak Spanish only and another
language
 had an upward trend,
whereas
 multilingual speakers and
German
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the German
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language
 group stabilised at the same level. Unlikely, people who were able to speak French only,
in addition
 to English and could not speak any other
language
 declined gradually.
To begin
 with, the proportion of
Spanish
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the Spanish
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only
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group was two times bigger than
another
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language
 speakers, according
for
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 30% and 15% respectively in 2000. These groups followed the same pattern,
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 gradually for 5 per cent , standing at 35% and 20%
accordingly
 in 2004.
While
 multilingual humans and German only group levelled off at 10 per cent in both years, no other
language
 and
French only
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 groups were higher than these students, plateauing at 20% and 15% in order in 2000.
Likewise
, the proportions dropped noticeably to the same amount (10%) in the next year.
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