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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007.
#unemployment #rates #uk #rest #europe #japan
The given line graph shows the
unemployment
 rates in three different groups: the UK, the rest of
Europe
 and
Japa
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Japan
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, from 1933 to 2007.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the
unemployment
 rates both in the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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 and other European countries gradually improved,
whereas
 that of
in
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Japan was on the rise.
However
, it is interesting to note that
that
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of in
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Europe
was
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fluctuated but still
on
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in
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a
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crisis with the highest rates of
unemployment
 on average.
To begin
 with, in 1993, a closer look at the line graph report that the UK
aacounted
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accounted
 for the highest rate of people being unemployed among all groups, followed by
Europe
 at 9 and Japan at 2, respectively. It is noticeable that
rate
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 of
unemployment
 in
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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 gradually alleviated with
constant
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a constant
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 dropped at nearly half of its previous figures in 2001 and remained stable before slightly
rose
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 in 2007. In
Europe
, on
one
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 hand, reached its peak in 1997 at almost 12 before slowly
decline
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declining
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 to just under 8 in 2007. Surprisingly, in Japan, it experienced
small
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a small
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 but stable rise in 1999, skyrocketed to its peak at 6 in 2003 and dropped constantly to 4
at the end
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unemployment rate
  • Fluctuation
  • Economic growth
  • Economic recovery
  • Comparative analysis
  • Steady decline
  • Modest stability
  • Broader economic challenges
  • Economic reform
  • Structural issues
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