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task 1 Summarize the information in the table/graph showing the percentage share of total world wheat production by Asia, Europe, and other parts of the world from 1840 to 2000, highlighting the main features and making relevant comparisons."

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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of total share of
wheat
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production
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in
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world-wide
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worldwide
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 by Asia, Europe and other countries from the years 1840 to 2000.
Overall
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, Europe had the highest share of
wheat
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production
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 in the given period
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,
rest
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 of the countries stood at the
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.
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, Asia dominated
the
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wheat
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 cultivation but gradually declined in the middle of the following years
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furthermore
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 a noticeable climb in later years.
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 the graph, in 1840, India had a share of 40 in
wheat
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production
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, which significantly fell to 30 in 1880 and to 20 in 1920. After that, it exhibited a trajectory upward trend and reached 40 in 2000. Meanwhile, Europe was second in
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 of
wheat
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 in 1840 with 40 markedly
rose
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 to a peak of 50 in 1920 before falling to 28 in 2000. It is clear from the graph that,
rest
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 of the countries started off moderately
from
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 10 in 1840 and reached the summit at 38 in 1960 and decreased to slightly over 30 in 2000
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Consider using connecting words and phrases to improve the flow and clarity of your essay, such as 'additionally', 'however', and 'in contrast'. This will enhance coherence and cohesion.
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Make sure the comparisons follow logically and that all significant trends and data points have been fully addressed.
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The essay effectively summarizes the data from the graph, providing a clear picture of the trends over the specified period.
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Key comparisons between regions are made, presenting a comprehensive understanding of the shifts in wheat production globally.

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