The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. IELTS Diagram

The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 Write at least 150 words.

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The pie chart gives information about the access of passing students in various working sectors from Brighton University in the year 2019. It is noted from the chart that there are 10 employment sections including
service
industries
, manufacturing
industries
, politics and government, education, civil
service
, transportation and warehousing, science and technology, charity, sport, and others. Among
these
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these,
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the highest rates of
participations
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participation
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are in
service
industries
, manufacturing
industries
, politics and government,
education
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and education
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.
In contrast
, the lowest rates are from civil
service
, transportation and warehousing, science and technology, charity, sport, and others. In 2019, 33%
graduates
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of graduates
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were employed in
service
industries
whereas
16.3 %, 14.7% and 12.1%
degree
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of degree
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holders joined in
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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industry, education,
and
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apply
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politics and government respectively. Only 0.1% and 0.3%
students
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of students
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were involved in charity and sports after their
graduations
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graduation
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. In civil
service
and transportation and warehousing the proportions were 5.6% and 7.8 % respectively.
On the other hand
, 7.3%
graduated
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of graduated
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fellows joined in the field of science and technology but
in
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opposite 2.8% were involved in other sections.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportions
  • Graduates
  • Employment sectors
  • Distribution
  • Industry
  • Attracted
  • Significant trends
  • Comparisons
  • Popular
  • Moderate level of interest
  • Observations
  • Implications
  • Economic factors
  • Future trends
  • Illustrates
  • Majority
  • Elaborated
  • Moderate
  • Summarized
  • Potential implications
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