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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
number
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 of students wether they are
man
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men
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 or
woman
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women
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 is different
by
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over
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the
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apply
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time, and in every period of time there are more or
less
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fewer
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 students than it was before, and there
are
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is
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 a huge
different
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difference
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 between the people who study full-time and part-time. In 1970/71 the
number
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 of males who studied
in
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apply
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full-time was 1000
thousands
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thousand
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 which was the biggest
number
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, but it was the lowest in part-time education,
in
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on
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 the
oposite
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opposite
 in 1980/81 and 1990/91 the
number
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 of
mens
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men
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 who studied
in
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apply
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full-time was less and the part-time was a lot more
specially
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especially
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 in 1990/91.
Womens
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Women
 had the biggest
number
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 in
this
Linking Words
 chart by the females who studied
in
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apply
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full-time in 1990/91.
Also
Linking Words
 in 1970/71 females had the lowest
number
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 in part-time education, and by
the
Correct determiner usage
that
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 time, the
number
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 of
womens
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women
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 who studied was getting bigger and bigger.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Further education
  • Full-time study
  • Part-time study
  • Trends
  • Participation
  • Distribution
  • Disparities
  • Proportions
  • Growth
  • Policy changes
  • Cultural shifts
  • Gender equity
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