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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
number
 of students wether they are
man
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men
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 or
woman
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women
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 is different
by
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over
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the
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apply
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time, and in every period of time there are more or
less
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fewer
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 students than it was before, and there
are
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is
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 a huge
different
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difference
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 between the people who study full-time and part-time. In 1970/71 the
number
 of males who studied
in
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apply
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full-time was 1000
thousands
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thousand
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 which was the biggest
number
, but it was the lowest in part-time education,
in
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on
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 the
oposite
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opposite
 in 1980/81 and 1990/91 the
number
 of
mens
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men
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 who studied
in
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apply
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full-time was less and the part-time was a lot more
specially
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especially
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 in 1990/91.
Womens
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Women
 had the biggest
number
 in
this
 chart by the females who studied
in
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apply
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full-time in 1990/91.
Also
 in 1970/71 females had the lowest
number
 in part-time education, and by
the
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that
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 time, the
number
 of
womens
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women
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 who studied was getting bigger and bigger.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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