The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
this
table
illustrate
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about
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global
water
use by
sector
although
the table
show
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shows
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that
brazil
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Brazil
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population is 176 million and
on the other hand
democratic republic of
cogo
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Cogo
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population is 5.2 million .
however
this
calculation of numbers was standing for the year
of
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2000 ,
furthermore
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the Irrigated land
show
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the land of
brazil
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Brazil
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with 26,500 km and for the republic
congo
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Congo
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100 km .
this
is
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a marvelous
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marvelous
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marvellous
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standers
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standard
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of landscapes that will
stands
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for any type of
water
sector
gobaly
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globally
on the other
hand
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the
water
consumption per person of
brazil
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Brazil
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is 359 m and the
democartic
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democratic
republic
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Republic
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of
congo
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Congo
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is 8 m , the
inurmous
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enormous
infamous
ginormous
years that went through starting from 1990 less than 1000 was
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agriculture
acgriculture
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agriculture considered highest
considerd
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considered
consider
highst
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highest
of the
water
sector
followed by industrial use and
lastely
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lastly
lately
domestic use in
conclustion
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conclusion
that
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the
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global
water
sector
could give
and
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apply
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inurmose
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purpose
and remarkable results with time and year increase as the graph
show
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shows
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, saving
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the world
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world
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world's
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wild plant
water
will
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be considre
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considre
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considered
is
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as
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form
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for
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humanity
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of humanity
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wishing more
sprede
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spread
golbaly
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globally
of
saveings
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savings
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, sector with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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