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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.
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The line graphs presented describe New Zealand import
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 among
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 and
Japan
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 throughout the period of 1994 and 2004, measured in
NZ
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$ million.
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, a slight increase in imports from
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 is seen,
whereas
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japanese
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 imports saw a decline.
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,
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Australia
 accounted for higher
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 when compared to
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 for the most time.
Australia
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 fluctuated over time. In 1994
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 illustrated 4000 million
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$, peaking over 8000 million
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$ in 2004.
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 saw a drop in 1999, accounting for 3000
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$, which was lower than 4000NZ$ figured by
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 imports that year.
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 saw a surge from 1994 to 1997, accounting for 3000
NZ
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$ and roughly 6200NZ$, respectively. There was a significant downward trend towards the end of the period, accounting for 2000 $
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 in 2004. In 1997 and 1999,
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 described higher
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 than
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, displaying over 6200
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$ and 4100
NZ
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$, as opposed to
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that
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 displayed about 5500
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$ and 3000
NZ
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$.
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