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The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares information about the 4 basic spending ways,mainly food,electronic equipment,music and videos by young people and
adults
,who lived in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in 1998 .
Overall
,
it is clear that
children
spent
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spend
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 more
money
 than others.
Furthermore
, the least amount of budget
needed
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is needed
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to
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for
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 videos. At the outset,
although
 39% of
money
given
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was given
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 to food by women,boys paid 9% of their income to food.
if
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If adults
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Adults
 used 25% of
money
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their money
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 to
eating
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eat
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,
children
 lost 10%.
Additionally
, women filled only 1% of
cash
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their cash
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 to electronic
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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,
however
,
children
 were spending 23% of
money
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their money
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to
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on
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electronical
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electronic
 devices.
Adults
 and girls spent 5% of
income
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their income
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to
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in
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this
 category.
Moreover
,
Adult
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Adults
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,
man
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men
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 and
woman
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women
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 wasted 5% of their budget
to
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on
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 music,though girls paid 40% of their income.
Nonetheless
, despite 0.5% of
money
 was filled to videos by women,boys
layed
Correct your spelling
laid
 out 18%.
Adults
,men and
children
 spent 1, 2 and 12% of their financial budget respectively.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, children, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion of income
  • spending habits
  • significant differences
  • trends
  • necessity
  • preference
  • lifestyle
  • expenditure
  • allocate
  • consumer behavior
  • contrast
  • notably
  • on the other hand
  • account for
  • percentage of income
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