The charts show the percentage of male and female workers in three employment sectors in two countries in 2007.
The pie charts show two sexual workers in percentages in three employment positions in two parts of the world in 2007.
Overall
, the amount of Industry triples higher in B
from A . While
, the extent of services is significantly greater in female jobholders in state B
than in sector A .
Services measurement is 9 % higher than 56% in male employees in nation B
than the same one in A. While
the agriculture's extent is 26% more than B
male portion 3 %. But in sector industry B
male countryside has 32 % which is more by 17% than male province A.
Services' measurement is the same while
, the female labourers in Kingdom A's agriculture is more than 42 % from female assistants in part B
in 1%.The A's industry percentage is 8% which is lower than 3
% ofCorrect article usage
the 3
Correct article usage
the B
B
one
.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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