The bar chart details dairy production for the top producers around the world in 2012.

The bar chart illustrates the
amount
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of dairy produced by main universal manufacturers in 2012. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that
milk
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was the most-produced item, and
milk
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powder
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was the lowest one. It is
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clear that
India
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, the European Union, the United States, and Brazil were the main producers of
milk
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, cheese, and butter,
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milk
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powder
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was assembled mostly by China, New Zealand, and the European Union. In terms of
milk
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, the European Union accounted for the production of 142970 metric
tons
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, slightly higher than
India
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which produced 127000 metric
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. The United States had the least important role regarding
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, producing 90038 metric
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. The EU was responsible for the most
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of cheese fabrication, and the US was the second country (7120
MT
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and 4925
MT
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respectively). Among the three, the lowest
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of cheese came from Brazil. Considering butter,
India
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which manufactured 4500 metric
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was the first region, followed by
India
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which could produce about half that of
India
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(2040
MT
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). Here, the US contributed to the least assembly (at 810). In the case of
milk
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powder
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, China and New Zealand produced roughly the same
amount
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(1200 and 1110 in respective order). The EU was the third
milk
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powder
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manufacturer
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producing 770
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in 2012.

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General
Ensure all data is represented accurately without numerical errors.
General
Double-check country mentions for accuracy; ensure each is uniquely identified without repeat errors.
Task Achievement
The essay provides a detailed account of dairy production with sufficient quantitative data.
Coherence and Cohesion
Logical structure and segmentation of information make it easy to follow.
Task Achievement
Comparisons among countries are clearly articulated, offering insightful contrasts.

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